Narrative Practice

Hi in my class we have been practicing how to write a narrative so this is my Narrative. Hope you like it. Have you've been Bullied before? On a nice sunny day there were lots of kids. They all had a picnic at the park. There was a boy name Jake he was all lonely. There was three boys and they were bullies everyday he wanted to go to the park he would get bullied by them. As soon as he got home he had a black eye his mum was so worried about him. He didnt want to tell his mum. Because he would get bullied he said he has had enough of them bulling them so he got all his friends to scare them and never come back. So they didn't but one day they came back they even bullied him more and he got so injured he was dying he had to go to the hospital. But he got all healed. The boys that were bullying him they moved out. Jake was so happy he said “YAY!! i wont get bullied anymore”. After they were gone he lived happily ever after. For this story the boy named Jake he was so friendly and kind. He wasn't bossy and he was a precious boy.